The pie chart shows the percentage of persons arrested in the five years ending 1994 and the bar chart shows the most recent reasons for arrest. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features

The pie chart shows the percentage of persons arrested in the five years ending 1994 and the bar chart shows the most recent reasons for arrest. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features
The pie charts provide information about the proportion of people who died in 2 different genders in five years ending 1994
while
the bar chart reveals the major reasons why they passed out.
Overall
,
men
who are still alive were less than
women
and public drinking is the highest way affecting death.
According to
the data, there were several causes of death. The most reason was taken by public drinking causing the death of both
men
and
women
, contributing 31% and 37% respectively. Drinking driving, breach of
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order, theft,
as well as
other reason influenced more dead
men
than
women
. They registered more than 15% for
men
with the exception of drinking
while
driving with 26%.
Although
assault and no answer
as well as
public drinking caused more dead females, nearly 20% of
women
were killed and only 7% of these were with no answer.
On the other hand
, it can be clearly seen that over the period, there
was
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32%
males
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of males
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passed out ,
however
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the percentage of arrested females was a mere 9%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words men, women with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • arrests
  • percentage
  • trend
  • year-over-year
  • increase/decrease
  • significant
  • comparative analysis
  • prevalent
  • legal implications
  • law enforcement
  • policy-making
  • crime statistics
  • societal impact
  • fluctuations
  • data interpretation
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