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Some people say that it is necessary to possess talent to become a successful sportsperson. Others, however, believe that hard work and practice are required. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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 to become a successful sportsperson,
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 should have
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, but some
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 advocate that
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 and hard
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 are required. In my view,
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, hard
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 and
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 are important for any player. In
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 hand,
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 say that
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 or technique is important in any sport, they
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 debate that even if anyone spends time
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practice
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 cannot become successful if they do not have inbuilt
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, the UK government took previous commonwealth games seriously and targeted sending more players in various categories. the ministry tried its best to train many
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, but it failed because
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 cannot become a sportsperson with only training or
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 says that hard
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 and proper training are important for any player to give their best in the game. They
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 argue that, even if
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 has
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,
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 cannot become special without hard
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. Their
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 can be sharpened only by
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 and hard
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. They quote
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 of the famous sayings "
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 makes man perfect" to support their argument.
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, many proven players reiterate the importance of
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 in many interviews. I agree with both statements and in my view, both
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 and hard
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 are very important to be a successful sportsperson. Built
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 motivates in choosing a sports career and hard
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 helps to achieve career aspirations.
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,
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 should have the luck to get the right opportunities at right time.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • natural talent
  • competitive advantage
  • innate ability
  • intuitive understanding
  • perform under pressure
  • early recognition
  • enhance skills
  • hone skills
  • rigorous training
  • dedication
  • perseverance
  • strong work ethic
  • relentless effort
  • consistent practice
  • long-term success
  • continuous improvement
  • resilience
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