Some of the methods used in advertising are unethical and unacceptable in today’s society. To what extent do you agree with this view?

Nowadays in worldwide nations, every moment, we
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advertisements on TV shows,
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or
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intersections. In what methods they are produced or how much
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care about
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trend
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making them? I believe they
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to have more
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to earn more money regardless
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its consequences.
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point of view, some families my does not need something
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on tv, but as home
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see the
advertisement
will feel
that is
a good idea to have it and decide to buy it immediately. In another case, there
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families who have young offspring who mentally
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not wise enough to perceive everything in
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situation.
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, they will have high demand
while
they are watching a new toy
advertisement
. Begging his parent to purchase it and crying all time.
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his poor father will be
finally
obliged to buy the toy. In
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point, they may use psychological weaknesses;
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, by displaying a young lady with
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body who is using some stuff on
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show
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to attract people for the good. It may
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not
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bad, but if we go deep
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down will understand
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how it may have an effect
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brain and corrupt it. Or by using
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on
cigarette
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box "the ideal of a manhood" as a person
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this
advertisement
on the box, will feel
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his dreams and will buy it. In conclusion, the
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the bad effects the
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may cause on people, will
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them
due to
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their customers satisfying. But it may have bad consequences on society which
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suggest authorities make some plans for the circumstance to check and control advertisements before showing up.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Unethical
  • Unacceptable
  • Deceptive
  • Exaggerated
  • Misleading
  • Manipulation
  • Vulnerable
  • Targeted advertising
  • Perpetuation
  • Societal norms
  • Stereotypes
  • Negative body image
  • Intrusion of privacy
  • Data-driven
  • Over-saturation
  • Desensitization
  • Annoyance
  • Greenwashing
  • Eco-conscious
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