Some countries have legal ages at which people can drink. Other countries believe not have strict laws is a better policy. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

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It is considered illegal in some
countries
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to purchase alcoholic beverages in some
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,
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in other
countries
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people
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believe that
teenagers
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should have the right to make their own decisions about
alcohol
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consumption.
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not inhibiting adolescents from drinking might lead to safer drinking situations, I believe that setting an age limit for consuming
alcohol
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is far more beneficial. In some
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countries
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there are laws against minors drinking because it has proven effective in lowering health-related risks among
teenagers
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and I agree.
Firstly
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,
teenagers
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will not die
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of
alcohol
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poisoning.
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is because they will not need to purchase illegally-made and dangerous alcoholic drinks.
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, traffic accidents and fatalities will be reduced since irrational
teenagers
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will not make any fatal decisions.
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, bars and nightclubs are not safe environments for
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and by not being allowed to drink they will not be present in those places.
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, there are some
people
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who believe adolescents should not be kept away from
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and should be allowed to consume and possess
alcohol
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. They believe doing so will diminish the thrill of breaking the law to get a drink which
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decreases crime rates as young adults tend to forge ID cards in order to get into a bar. It is
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thought that drinking
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in regulated environments with supervision could decrease unsafe drinking activities and the number of underage
people
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who are hurt from
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-related injuries will be reduced. The findings from a recent survey done in Germany demonstrate that injury rates are much lower since
teenagers
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are allowed to drink
alcohol
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under the legal age.
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,
while
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people
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may vary in opinions, I think that a minimum legal drinking age saves lives and protects health.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Legal drinking age
  • Underage drinking
  • Health repercussions
  • Addiction
  • Drunk-driving
  • Responsible drinking
  • Forbidden fruit
  • Social rituals
  • Public health
  • Safety framework
  • Risks of alcohol
  • Cultural differences
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