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In many countries today .Crime novels and tv crime dramas

#countries #crime #novels #tv #dramas
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Crime
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 novels and
tv
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crime
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 shows are becoming more popular these days. I believe that
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 novels and
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crime
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 shows are becoming more famous
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 the fact that
people
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 are very curious about the
personality
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 of
criminals
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also
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 they take ideas from those shows and
books
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 and use them as a tool to protect themselves. First of all,
people
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 are very curious about the
personality
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 of the criminal. it is rare for
people
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 to know a criminal personally
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 they become very curious about them.
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, in Saudi ,Arabia many
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 watch the
tv
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 series (You) Since they are not very familiar with
criminals
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thus
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 they find it interesting to watch because they can learn more about the
personality
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 of
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People
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 take ideas from those shows and
books
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 in order to protect themselves.
People
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 do the opposite of what the victim on the show is doing and avoid a certain time to stay outside their homes to protect themselves from
criminals
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. With the increasing number of crimes each day
people
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 became very anxious that they might be the next victim. I believe that
people
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 should stop watching those kinds of shows
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 the fact that it might affect them in a negative way. Being used to watching
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 shows might make
people
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 more used to seeing crimes and that might make them think it is a normal act,
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 in the future the
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 rate may increase even more because of those kinds of shows .
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, I believe that
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 shows and
books
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 have a negative impact on
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,
People
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 tend to watch
crime
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 shows and read
crime
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books
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 because they are very curious about the
personality
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 of
criminals
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 and they take ideas from those shows and
books
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 to use as a protection tool against
criminals
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. A great suggestion would be that the
tv
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 government should ban airing
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 shows and selling
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 novels
this
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 would make
people
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 move to watch other types of shows.
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