Nowadays, some
people
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young age really enjoy
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going shopping to fill their spare time, because they
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that buying something can release their stress.
However
,
habits like shopping
also
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some
. In
this
essay, I will explain more about it and give alternative activities to
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generation to enjoy their spare time.
There are some disadvantages
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shopping
behaviorChange the spelling
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in
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generation.
To begin
with, shopping could bring dissipation for some
people
. It is hard to manage the money, especially when you were young, when they see the discount sign, it could make them buy something they
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not need.
For
when they went to the
mall
to
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and
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the buy two get three sign, most
would
be buyChange the verb form
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two pieces of items to get the free one, in
they spend more money
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something they
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not need.
Second,
when they go to the
mall
or just
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through their phone to do online shopping, they could spend hours without
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. When they searching for something, it is
to not look at other things. For
, they went to the
mall
to buy clothes
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but ended up
also
looking for shoes and bags and without they
they drown in shopping
activity
the
mall
almost close.
BesideReplace the word
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shopping, there are some activities that
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generation could do to spend their time. The first one would be
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sportFix the agreement mistake
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. Not only
sport
could be
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activity
for some
people
, but
also
bring health to their body.
For example
, white water
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like rafting
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fun
activityFix the agreement mistake
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to do with their friends and it could bring health too because they have to walk to the starting point and it
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quite far.
Next,
travelling could
also
become another
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activity
thing to do. It
is makesChange the verb form
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young
people
to Change the verb form
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see another part of the world and they could learn
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cultures.
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say they went to another country, not only they would see
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, but
also
they could taste the foods there.
To conclude
, I believe that
people
in
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generations should
be encourageChange the verb form
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to do other activities rather than shopping,
such
as
sport
and travelling. Because as we know shopping has some
toChange preposition
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young
people
.