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A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer. He/She has asked for your advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter, - explain why you think your friend would enjoy a camping holiday - describe some possible disadvantages - say whether you would like to go camping with your friend this summer

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Dear John, I'm writing to provide you with suggestions based on my past experiences so that you can have a great summer vacation. I'm aware of your hectic routine that's why I told you multiple times to take a break from your work
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 will not only give you some time to relax but
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 you will enjoy the natural beauty.
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, camping is a great idea to connect with nature where you can enjoy picturesque scenery
while
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 cooking, eating, and talking with your friends at a bonfire.
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, there are a few downsides to camping.
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you may be required to acclimatise yourself
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 the weather else you will catch a cold for that reason you should wear warm clothes.
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, public toilets are mostly unhygienic.
Last
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, remote sites are expensive.
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, these are a few challenges you are gonna face.
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It's been a long since I went on a vacation and you are planning for it.
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, definitely, I will join you and we will have fun together. I look forward to hearing from you. Best regards, Ben

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Coherence & Cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph is focused and maintains coherence through clear topic sentences and subsequent supporting sentences.
Task Achievement
Be mindful of grammatical range and accuracy in order to avoid minor errors that could impede fluency.
Task Achievement
Make certain that the main purpose of the letter is maintained throughout, to ensure your advice on camping is helpful and relevant.
Coherence & Cohesion
Utilize a wider range of linking words and phrases to enhance connectivity between sentences and paragraphs.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • adventure
  • serenity
  • outdoors
  • refreshing
  • hustle and bustle
  • inherent
  • foster
  • distractions
  • cost-effective
  • unpredictable
  • wildlife
  • adequate preparation
  • physical demands
  • researching
  • campsite
  • lasting memories
  • mutual interests
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