Some of the methods used in advertising are unethical and unacceptable in today’s society. To what extent do you agree with this view?

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In recent times, advertising
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becoming
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increasingly popular. Some
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believe that the ways commercials are aired are
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and unacceptable in society. I completely agree with
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view because many
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contain inappropriate scenes, and
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could affect the younger generation negatively. Many commercials display inappropriate pictures. They incorporate beautiful models that are dressed in their underwear to persuade their customers. It is unethical because the
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advertised does not have any relationship with the models. It does not give extra
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about the
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. They are placed there to appeal to the customers and bring more attention to the advert.
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, in a Mazda car advert, two ladies were dressed in their underwear
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washing the car. It is unacceptable because it does not give extra details but seduces the viewers.
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like
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should be rejected
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inappropriate content.
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, many
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contain false
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. They give the viewers unrealistic expectations. It could
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mean deliberately omitting relevant details so that
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are not discouraged from buying them.
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, many weight loss products advertised do not work as expected. It usually takes longer than expected before a significant effect is noticed on the weight, so they would either remove that
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or focus on the results. They do
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because many
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are more interested in the outcome, and they only inquire about more details when they have started using the
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. In conclusion, some
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think that the methods employed in
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nowadays are unethical and inappropriate. I believe some contain immoral scenes and give wrong or incomplete
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about the
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Unethical
  • Unacceptable
  • Deceptive
  • Exaggerated
  • Misleading
  • Manipulation
  • Vulnerable
  • Targeted advertising
  • Perpetuation
  • Societal norms
  • Stereotypes
  • Negative body image
  • Intrusion of privacy
  • Data-driven
  • Over-saturation
  • Desensitization
  • Annoyance
  • Greenwashing
  • Eco-conscious
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