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People are surrounded by advertisement which has an increased effect on our lives. Do you think the positive effects of this outweigh the negative effects?

#people #advertisement #effect #lives #effects #outweigh
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today
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 world,
advertisements
becomes
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important
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an important
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 part of humankind which
effects
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affects
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 them in different ways. In
this
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 we will discuss numerous good
a
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 well as bad
impcts
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impacts
if
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of
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advertisements
. To commence with, in
today
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today's
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 world
due to
 hectic life
people
 get very less time to explore their favourite sites for the shopping of goods and services.
therefore
,
advertisements
seems
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boonful
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bountiful
 to
people
 for knowledge of new trends and fashion which
further
 help them make
a
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apply
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quick decisions regards their purchases.
For example
, Apple company advertise their products to give knowledge and
guidence
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guidance
 to
their
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 customers about new products.
In addition
,
advertisements
 become a source of income for many
people
 as
their
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 are
alot
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a lot
 of
platform
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platforms
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 for
advertisemnets
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advertisements
advertisement
 to attract consumers very quickly. Applications like Instagram,
Facebook
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and Facebook
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 are earning good
profit
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profits
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. On
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the other
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other
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 side, Numerous
people
 are promoting cheap and
poor quality
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poor-quality
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of
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apply
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products and services respectively through attractive
advertisements
.
Moreover
, fraudsters are using
personal
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the personal
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informtion
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information
 of customers as they click on links to open
the
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advertisements
 for more information. In conclusion,
Advertisements
makes
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make
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people
's lives very easy and comfortable as everything is just a click away so in my opinion whether
advertisements
 have some negative impacts but these
are outweigh
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are outweighed
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by
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its
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their
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 benefits.
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