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Some people say that adevtising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. discuss both these views and give your opinion.

#people #attention
Nowadays, there is no doubt that we have become increasingly surrounded by
advertisements
, those seen on TV, social media and websites. It could be argued that these
advertisements
 had persuaded
people
 to buy unessential things,
however
, others believe that they are the best way to find indispensable
products
.
This
 essay will investigate my own point of view. Essentially, it is evident that advertising is a great method to make shopping wiser, as it enables
people
 to know about new
products
 that can offer comfort
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them
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and help them in their lives. To clarify
this
, without these
advertisements
,
people
 would never know what product to be used for any need. A good example
for
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this
 is provided by
people
 who buy medicine and painkillers they need from
advertisements
 especially the elderly, as they will be more familiar with pills and vitamins that can improve their immune system. What is more, it is worth considering that some
advertisement
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 may include
negative
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 impact, as they only focus on selling things without
the
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quality.
In addition
, some companies sell
some
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unnecessary
products
 that may attract
people
.
To conclude
, despite the drawback that it encourages buying
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 brands, it seems that the benefits of advertising
are
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outweigh
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. As
,
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 it
it
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helps them to familiarize themselves with
products
 that would help them.
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • persuade
  • promote
  • attract
  • influence
  • impact
  • consumerism
  • commercialism
  • market
  • product
  • brand
  • endorsement
  • manipulative
  • saturated
  • overwhelmed
  • repetitive
  • distracting
  • irrelevant
  • exaggerated
  • misleading
  • desensitized
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