The role of education is to prepare children for the modern world. Schools should cut subjects such as arts and music out of the curriculum so that children can focus on subject such as information technology. To what extent do you agree?
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It is generally argued that innovative subjects like IT
technology
and robot technology
should be added to the school curriculum instead
of arts, music
and choreography. However
, these subjects play a crucial role in forming pupils' brain development and imagination as well as
calming them down.
Admittedly, every subject is much more important for children's lifestyles, including music
and art. In fact, music
is something that can console everyone in any situation and help individuals to concentrate as well as
overcome depression or stress. For instance
, in ancient Sparta, boys were taught music
and poetry so that they could obtain the motivation to defend their country and relax after wars. That is
why nowadays, there is a special song in the army of every country. When it comes to art, if pupils learn how to draw and paint pictures, they will broaden their minds as well as
enhance their creativity and imagination. As an example of this
view, Leonardo DaVinci invented the first aeroplane scheme by drawing its structure.
Nevertheless
, in our contemporary world, there has been a great demand for hi-techs over the past few decades. Therefore
, most teenagers prefer attending IT courses rather than recreational subjects. For
this
reason, most schools are applying such
courses in developing countries. In Japan, for example
, every school leaver has to create something new like a robot or software before finishing school. Otherwise
, they can not get their qualifications and attestations. In our country, information technology
is also
developing rapidly day by day and promotes teaching this
subject as an academic value.
In conclusion, considering both these views, I strongly believe that arts and music
should be conducted with the help of computer technology
in schools.Submitted by saydusmonovasomiddin94 on
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