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It is important for people to take risk, both in their professional lives, and their personal lives

#people #risk #lives
As
life
 way, which is changes every second around the world, there is nothing to stay formal for the long term. So, as our humanity layout,
change
 is inevitable with our order or not. There are individual views that have opposite beliefs, about spending their lives doing similar routines daily. To avoid signing out of their comfort zone. The rest considered it a fabulous thing. Essentially, that depends on our imagination for the look of
change
. To explain, if our
change
 in the past is related to trouble and awful stuff, we will loathe
change
. There is a likelihood that’s will lead us to stick in our restful space and avoid stressful issues.
Otherwise
, some people think that
change
 is an incredible thing and experience. Often, they had a remarkable
change
 that allowed them to achieve something that added to their lives. Not necessarily a chance it could just be a learning lesson from
life
. In my view, I am inclined to
change
 only and only if there is an advantage back to me as soon as it happens. Despite if there is no guarantee for the way
change
 will come, I am with the
change
 preferred team. Usually, I tend to get non-routine
life
 and get
along with
 the future. Eventually, absolutes balance in
life
 is a requirement. We can not always control everything with our hands. So, we should accept there are changes at some point. The solution is to learn how to replace our panic to achieve profit from it.
Overall
, we must not give huge matter to every detail and stay looking at the filled cup, as who excepted
change
.
Submitted by Zainab Albahlool on

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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