In many countries large amounts of foods are wasted. Why do you think people waste food in this way? What can be done to reduce the amount of food thrown away? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 254 words.

In many nations, substantial
foods
are threw
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away. From my observation, it is because of the mas-manufacture of products of many
companies
and
also
people
's attitude toward
nutriments
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nutrients
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.
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about
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my point of view with detailed analyses. First and foremost, the main reason for
this
trend is
mas-manufacturing
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of
foods
. Today, many enterprises take a step
in
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nutriments
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the nutriments
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industry.
However
, all these
companies's
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goal is to achieve economic benefits, so they try to introduce new types of food with high frequency in order to gain attention from customers.
As a result
, a variety of nourishment will be excessive and be dumped after
their
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expire
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date. The solution to
this
problem is that governments should provide restrictions to
companies
so they can not mas-manufacture as many as they want. In my opinion, not only does
this
method impact
on
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the
amount
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of
foods
being created but
also
the
qualities
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quality
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of nutrients will be improved in order for
companies
competing
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to compete
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with each other.
Addition
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to the above, another reason for
this
circumstance is many
people
do not have
serious
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thought about nutrients nowadays, they just simply throw away the spare of their lunch or dinner.
Although
poverty still exists,
people
have experienced better life quality than in the past, so rarely does anyone realise the value of things
such
as nourishment these days. So
this
leads to the fact that they do not appreciate
foods
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food
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. I suppose
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an organization
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organization
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organizations
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should be created in order to strengthen
people
's attention
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the fact that many areas around the world still suffer
in
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hunger.
Therefore
,
instead
of wasting
foods
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food
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, they will use less amount of nutrients and donate the
spare
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to charities. In conclusion, there are two main reasons for
this
trend,
first
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responsibility belongs to
companies
and the second
belong
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to our society. Fortunately, each problem has its own solution and
not
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very hard to achieve.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • food waste
  • excessive
  • portion sizes
  • expiration dates
  • storage
  • preservation
  • inefficient
  • cultural
  • incentives
  • reduce
  • awareness
  • education
  • planning
  • organization
  • misinterpretation
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