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Many manufactured food and drink products contain high levels of sugar, which causes many health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to comsume less sugar.

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Nowadays, people are suffering from various issues
due to
 many reasons and excessive
sugar
 consumption is one of them as several food companies are adding enormous amounts of white poison to their
products
. Some believe that the consumption of
sugar
 will decrease
,
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 if the prices of those product increase. I partially support
this
 notion and going to explain my thoughts in the following paragraphs. To commence, consumption of the
products
 will be limited to some people
as a result
 because of unaffordability individuals will stop buying those
products
 and stop becoming prey the serious health issues. examples,in many European countries , the government has added a
sugar
 tax, if the amount of
sugar
 is more than a certain limit.
As a result
, the profit share of those
products
 significantly decreased in the yearly revenue of those industries. Adding taxes on packet food will be enough? Product companies should
also
 allocate their budget to opening hospitals and providing aid at subsidised prices.
For instance
, In ,India there are many tobacco companies have introduced hospitals in almost every city. So , a person who is already suffering from any illness can get good treatment at a cheap price.
Besides
this
, the government should encourage people to consume fruits and other natural
sugar
 sources.
Hence
, upgrading the price of sugary
products
 is not the only solution.
To conclude
,
although
 making
sugar
products
 more expensive solve the above problem at a certain level, good healthcare and advertisement campaign will make a huge impact on the purchase habit of the citizen of the country and it will be not only beneficial for them but
also
 for the nation as well.
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