Some people think that it is more beneficial to take part in sports which are played in teams, like football, while other people think that taking part in individual sports, like tennis or swimming, is better. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Many people believe that playing
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, like football is more positive,
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other think that individual
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, like swimming, is good. In my perspective,
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of them have
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benefit
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the soft
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skills
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,
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for developing
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that
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on
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senses of social, taking part in
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sports
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a sports
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team
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is better.
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essay will discuss
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both
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of
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views and tend to support that
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team
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teams
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more
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beneficial and provide feasible examples. Let’s start by looking at the positive impact on individual
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, which is for advancing soft skills. It is true that
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athletes
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who play
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individual
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have more experience to join
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championships
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by
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their own. In terms of
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they will develop their
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and concentration skills. Take most of
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the athletes
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in Indonesia as an example. Almost all of them will have a chance to become public
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figures
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, even to be brand
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ambassadors
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of product ads.
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, it is undeniable that individual
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are good for upgrading athlete skills and
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opportunities,
nevertheless
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its
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they
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only focus on themselves. Turning to the benefit
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part in
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sports
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which are played in groups.
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individual
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are good for upgrading
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the self-ability
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of
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athletes
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,
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in
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the group
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group
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groups
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more
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are more
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likely
plays
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on
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the role
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to improve
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self-skill and
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social awareness
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because
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ofbecause
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their experience on work in
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team
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a team
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.
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, Ronaldo
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is well-known as an incredible soccer player worldwide, in
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he not only
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opportunities
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their career but
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also
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has
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an interest
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in social
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in the world.
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, it cannot be denied that athletes who have exposure
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sports
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in
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team
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teams
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are more beneficial on their own and their surroundings. In conclusion, playing sport
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both
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individual and group are positive.
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, athletes
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who
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experienced
play
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playing
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sport
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sports
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in
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the team
a team
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team
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teams
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have
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a positive
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impact on
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self-development and
sense
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a sense
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of social awareness.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cooperation
  • team spirit
  • sense of belonging
  • community
  • leadership
  • trust
  • collective responsibility
  • dependency
  • self-reliance
  • self-discipline
  • goal setting
  • tailored development
  • flexibility
  • social support
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