Some people think that it is more beneficial to take part in sports which are played in teams, like football, while other people think that taking part in individual sports, like tennis or swimming, is better. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Many people believe that playing
sports
in group
, like football is more positive, Add an article
the group
a group
whereas
other think that individual sports
, like swimming, is good. In my perspective, both
of them have each
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on
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of
soft
and hard Add an article
the soft
skill
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skills
however
for developing skill
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skills
on
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in
team work
that Correct your spelling
teamwork
essential
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are essential
on
senses of social, taking part in Change preposition
to
sports
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a sports
team
is better. This
essay will discuss the
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apply
both
of
views and tend to support that Change preposition
apply
sports
in team
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teams
more
beneficial and provide feasible examples.
Let’s start by looking at the positive impact on individual Add a missing verb
are more
sports
, which is for advancing soft skills. It is true that athlete
who play Fix the agreement mistake
athletes
on
individual Change preposition
apply
sports
have more experience to join championship
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championships
by
their own. In terms of Change preposition
on
that
they will develop their Add a comma
,that
confident
and concentration skills. Take most of Replace the word
confidence
athletes
in Indonesia as an example. Almost all of them will have a chance to become public Add an article
the athletes
figure
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figures
ambassador
of product ads. Fix the agreement mistake
ambassadors
Hence
, it is undeniable that individual sports
are good for upgrading athlete skills and careers
opportunities, Change the noun form
career
nevertheless
its
only focus on themselves.
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they
take
part in Wrong verb form
taking
sport
which are played in groups. Fix the agreement mistake
sports
Although
individual sports
are good for upgrading self-ability
of Correct article usage
the self-ability
athlete
, Fix the agreement mistake
athletes
sports
in Add an article
the group
a group
group
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groups
more
likely Add a missing verb
are more
plays
on Change the verb form
to play
role
to improve Add an article
the role
a role
both
self-skill and social-awareness
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social awareness
because
their experience on work in Add the preposition
ofbecause
team
. Add an article
a team
For instance
, Ronaldo who
is well-known as an incredible soccer player worldwide, in Correct pronoun usage
apply
fact
he not only Add the comma(s)
,fact
great
opportunities Add a missing verb
has great
on
their career but Change preposition
in
he
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apply
also
has interest
in social Add an article
an interest
program
in the world. Fix the agreement mistake
programs
Thus
, it cannot be denied that athletes who have exposure on
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to
sports
in team
are more beneficial on their own and their surroundings.
In conclusion, playing sport Fix the agreement mistake
teams
on
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for
both
individual and group are positive. However
, athletes which
experienced Correct pronoun usage
who
play
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playing
sport
in Fix the agreement mistake
sports
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the team
a team
team
have Fix the agreement mistake
teams
positive
impact on Add an article
a positive
both
self-development and sense
of social awareness.Correct article usage
a sense
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