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What are some of the factors in modern society that causes this stress and how we can reduce it?

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In recent times, the world populations have been under massive tension
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 different crises between
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, climate,poverty and natural disasters,
Such
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 factors, definitely, increase
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 and anxiety in any population.
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 essay will explain those factors
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 their effect on societies and some suggestions that will reduce
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 impacts. First of all poverty, poverty tends to be the most significant issue that increases the
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 level in any society, adults people's priority is to provide requirements of daily life
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 as food, housing and so on, as they find challenges in providing any of these requirements the result will be anxiety and disappointment. Another factor is public
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 problems, latterly, we all suffered Covid19, which made an immense impact on everybody's life .
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 and deprivation, we have an environmental change which
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 brings a tough challenge to all humankind, authorities and the public as well keep thinking about the consequences of global warming that results in a variety of crises
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 as floods, earthquakes, hurricanes, etc.
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, humans rather than struggling with
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, should concentrate on fixing those issues in many ways starting from imposing laws against emissions to reduce them as much as possible,
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 global warming governments should find satisfactory solutions for the economy to increase living standards, another suggestion that makes people less stressful is resolving
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 issues by reforming all medical aspects and increasing the quality of
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 services.
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 but not least, even though the advancements in life we achieved, humanity still faces many challenges that make us worried and stressed,
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, it is the authority's and sometimes people's responsibility to treat
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 factors .
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