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Popular events like the football world cup and other international sporting occasions are essential in easing international tensions and releasing patriotic emotions in a safe way To what extent do you agree and disagree with this opinion?

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In
this
 modern generation, it is irrefutable fact that jealousy between two nation increase drastically.
However
, sporting events are the only way for getting big relief from
this
 problem. I will discuss some of the positive things about
this
 statement
along with
 the drawbacks in a
further
 essay.
To begin
 with, it is scientifically proven that watching or playing any sports games not only provides positive vibes in our body but it keeps our mind sharp and active. Nowadays, communities are addicted to watching athletes' games so authorities help big sports competitions once a year.
In addition
,
while
 organizing the football world cup in the town
then
 all fans are coming from different parts of the world and they learn the culture of the hosting country.
People
 are getting in touch with local
people
 and building strong bonds with those
people
 via these kinds of things it is quite easy for the government to live tension free from national partiality.
On the other hand
, international sporting occasions are quite costly so crowds have to spend more money to watch the big games live in the stadium.
For example
, one research conducted by The Times of India found that 70% of families who go out to the stadium to watch the world cup spent 25% higher money.
Moreover
, sometimes it
also
 happened that some matters happened between the audions
while
 watching events. In conclusion, there are numerous benefits for authorities and individuals to hold big sports competitions which make strong bonding between two different nation's
people
.
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