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Now a days extended family has less importance than past. Do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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I strongly disagree with
this
opnion
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opinion
option
, in my
opinion
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nowdays
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 everyone
want
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 to live alone and they have some other priorities. In
past
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the past
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 people loved to spend
maximum
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a maximum
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 of their time with family
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but unfortunatley
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unfortunatley
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unfortunately
,
new
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a new
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 generation is unaware
about
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 the benefits of living with
the
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extended
love
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 ones.
Moreover
, the main reason behind
this
 our family culture is social media. All of us are living in the digital world where no one
have
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that
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enough time so
this
 is the time we all need to
the
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see the lives of our
ancesters
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ancestors
 who had all the
activties
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activities
 with family. In the
end
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i
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 like to
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 to our generation that we should move with the modern world but we need to stick with our cultural basics.
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