The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of

new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and

make comparisons where relevant.
The graph
depicit
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depict
depicts
the number of closures and
opening
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openings
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in a given country. The observed period span from 2011-2018. By ignoring small year-to-year fluctuations, both closures and
opening
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openings
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display a declining trend. In 2011, the number of closed shops was approximately 6,400 and until 2014 it was
oscilating
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oscillating
between 6000 to 7000
cloasures
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closures
per year.
Then
, in 2015, the value plummeted below 1000, suggesting a possible economic boom.
However
, the fall was only temporal – in 2016 it
retured
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returned
to 5000 and remained like that
untill
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until
2018. The number of new shops marked the highest value in 2011 with nearly
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9000 newly
estabilished
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established
botiques
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boutiques
. In
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year, the maximum lowered to
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half. After that, in 2013 and 2014, the opening
srecored
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recorded
a linear increase by adding around 1000 more new shops than
previous
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year. In, 2015 the amount returned to 4000 and did not
experienced
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any significant change
untill
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until
2017. The drop to 3000 newly opened stores in 2018
also
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for the lowest value in our observed period.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • retail landscape
  • net growth
  • market dynamics
  • economic indicators
  • fluctuations
  • pivotal
  • consumption patterns
  • e-commerce
  • brick-and-mortar
  • downward/upward trend
  • stabilize
  • recession
  • boom
  • retail sector
  • closure rate
  • inauguration/opening rate
  • consumer market
  • saturate
  • commercial viability
  • profitability
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