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It is more important for a building to serve a purpose than to look beautiful. Architects should not worry about producing building as a work of art. Do you agree or disagree ?

#purpose #architects #work #art
It is common knowledge that property should meet the prime purpose
than
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 looks beautiful.
In addition
, the constructors should not be concerned with constructing a high rise as a work of art. I utterly agree with
this
 statement
due to
 some reasons
such
 as usability and safety.
İndividuals
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Individuals
 tend to work and live in an environment where they can feel comfortable. Considering the rush hour traffic, they prefer to have their workplaces or residences located in a well-suited area,
as well as
 having an environment that will provide their comfort wherever they are.
Due to
 the numerous surveys that some buildings look very elegant from the outside,
nevertheless
 the population who work and live in it are not satisfied with the somethings similar as narrow rooms, ventilation system and
this
trouble
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 them each and every day.  All in all, it is significant that the constructions are planned and built on account of individual targets. The second argument is security features which engineers
also
 focus on
it
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apply
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such
 as fire protection systems, emergency exits and earthquake resistance of buildings. Turkey was attacked by a bulky earthquake.
According to
 the Turkish press, more than 1,000 people lost their lives, 8,500 populations were injured and 2,800 ownerships were destroyed
as a result
 of a strong earthquake in Turkey these days.
Therefore
, architects ought to pay attention to ensuring the safety of the building. From what has been discussed above we may infer that the building's most vital is the purpose and uses of the building so try to utilise the place
as well as
 focus on security.
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Aesthetics
  • Usability
  • Wellbeing
  • Sustainable
  • Eco-friendly
  • Energy efficiency
  • Practicality
  • Psychological wellbeing
  • Urban landscape
  • Structural integrity
  • Natural disasters
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