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Some people think it's better ro choose friends who always

Some
people
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 argue that it's better to have
friends
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 who always agree with their opinion
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others
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 think that it's great to have
friends
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 who don't always agree with them . Some
people
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 believe that it's better
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friends
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 always agree with their
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on the other hand
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 some of them argue that it's better to have
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 who don't always agree with their
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. I think that having
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 Who have the same
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 as
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 means That Our personalities are similar which is an awesome thing because
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that we can rely more on each other and understand
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each other better.Some
people
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 argue that it's better to have
friends
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 who always agree with you .
people
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 like to talk to
others
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 who have
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different
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 of them
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 the fact that they can share different thoughts and understand that every person has a different way of seeing things . For ,example a friend of
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 has almost the opposite
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mine
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 and that always makes me very amazed about her way of thinking
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 I can understand
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 because of her . On the other side , Some
people
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 believe that it's great to have
friends
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 who don't always agree with them,
people
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 like to stay with
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 Who are similar to them because they have the same
opinions
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 and it means they have the same thoughts
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 they can rely on each other and understand each other more .
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 in high school girls tend to be
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 with
others
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 who always agree with their
opinions
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 because they can understand them more since they have a similar way of thinking.
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,some
people
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 love to spend time with
others
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 who have the same
opinions
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 as them
while
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others
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 like to spend time with
people
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 who have the opposite
opinions
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 of them,I believe that having
friends
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 who have the same
opinions
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 as
mine
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 is a great thing
due to
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 the fact that we can understand each other since we have similar thoughts.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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