In some countries, there has been an increase in the number of parents who educate their children themselves at home instead of sending them to school. Do you think the advantage of this outweigh the disadvantages?

In

this

present world, some

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prefer to

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their children at

home

rather than school. In my opinion, I consider that being study in school will be more

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. In the ensuing

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I will explain my

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in detail.

Firstly

,

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studying at school

have

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more feature than at

home

.

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, when you do

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with your friends, Effective communication skill is important that you should learn about. You can talk with many of your colleagues to be confident in

yourselve

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yourself

yourselves

.

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, it has been required

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many

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around the world, which is a good remarkable to get a

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job

.

Furthermore

, the teachers have more qualifications,

hence

, they can explain in detail deeply, which will translate information in the best way to students.

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,

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learning alone at

home

may lead your life to be miserable.

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, In

this

time without accredited certification and

a good knowledge

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, it is almost impossible to get a

jop

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job

, which will not let you get

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to face

hard

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life.

In other words

, you have to be highly educated to make your life easier.

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, if parents

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not qualified, they can not

delivering

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knowledge to

boy

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the boy

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,

therefore

, worse knowledge get

poor

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result

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, and

this

will

be affect

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in

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his

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next future.

To conclude

, the accredited certification is important for

person

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a person

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, Which is not

alow

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allow

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for people to get without

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an educationl

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educationl

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education

educational

at university.

It is clear that

learn

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at

institute

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an institute

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is more beneficial than at

home

.

therefore

, more effectively.