Due to development and rapid expansion of supermarkets in some countries many small local business are unable to compete.some thought that the closure of local business will bring about the death of local communities. To what extent do you agree??

Irrefutably true that small local
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has been disappeared as
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of big supermarkets so some masses think that it can halt the
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small budget
business
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. I fully agree with
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. To
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, in
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era of inflation, it is very hard to small
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to
compete
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big budget markets so these big
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business
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always
dominent
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dominant
to local markets as costly
facilties
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as well as
with the help of them the allure the customer which decrease the sale of
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community ,
as a result
, small
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business
businesses
get down. Moving
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world
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most people are from poor
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family
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

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  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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  • In conclusion
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  • To summarize
  • Finally
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