Some people believe that media should be allowed to publish information about the private lives of famous people. Others say that everybody has a right to privacy and this practice must be controlled or even stopped. Discuss both views.

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Everyone wants to know about the real life of a public figure,

hence

, keeps them interested

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a related piece of work in a newspaper or on a

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channel about them, which ultimately results in a higher rating of these sources.

However

, a category of society believes that it is unethical to reveal their personal details in public, as it is annoying for them. Permission may be granted after careful consideration of the pros and cons of both views which will be discussed in

this

essay. On one hand,

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channels must be permitted to include some programs or news on the personal life of stars because

this

may help in gaining the interest of viewers and would result in higher profit.

This

due to

the fact that fans are interested in knowing the success stories and the real-life challenges of their ideals.

For example

, the videos about the birthday celebration of the Bollywood superstar, Shah Rukh Khan, receive a massive number of views on

youtube

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YouTube

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On the other hand

, a newspaper should not bother a celebrity by disclosing everything about them. They don't want

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apply

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their followers

know

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each challenge they are facing,

such

as divorce, illness, etc., or all the little plans they have with their families. Some years back,

for instance

, a popular cricketer, Shahid Afridi, had to arrive at the Jinnah

international airport

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International Airport

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along with

his daughter, and

this

news somehow leaked. A large crowd gathered to receive him and made him uncomfortable, as he was getting no way out to save his daughter from being in contact with anyone in the crowd.

To conclude

, even though, it's good to keep an uncommon man posted about the lifestyle of their beloved popular ones, it

also

has a negative side that destroys the secrecy of a respectable person. So, the agencies must be allowed to highlight their lifestyle by imposing some limitations.

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task response

The essay provides a balanced discussion of both views, but there is room for improvement in providing a more comprehensive response and supporting the main points with relevant examples.

coherence and cohesion

The essay exhibits some coherence and cohesion in terms of logical structure and supported main points. However, there are areas that could benefit from clearer introduction and conclusion.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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Topic Vocabulary:

public figures
private individuals
free press
transparency
accountability
corruption
unethical behaviour
public interest
right to privacy
intrusion
psychological impact
loss of reputation
personal safety
ethical guidelines
responsible journalism
regulations
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