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Write about the following topic. In some countries in Europe, some children from the age of 11 or 13 go to schools to learn more practical skills that will help them get a job. Other children stay in schools which provide a more general academic education. What should schools do to prepare students for the world of work? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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In many nations like Europe, children at lower
age
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 will go to schools and concentrate to get practical
knowledge
 that they think will help their future and get more communication skills for
this
 competitive generation and some children attend institutions to gain theoretical
knowledge
. In
this
 topic, I am going to talk in detail about what are all the measures institutions should take to prepare students for the world of work. First and foremost, schools should teach initial things like behaviour, and ethics related to life, love, and caring towards the families and other persons who are younger and elder than them. Every institute teaches academic
knowledge
 . Among all, the ages of 11 to 13 are most crucial because at
this
 stage they will prepare themselves for their bright future.
Besides
, in European
countries
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 they will learn practical skills. Nowadays those are very important.
Secondly
, even though, the student receives constructive techniques from the educational centre they receive added values in their own ways.
for example
, some children will join tutorials for more information to get a grip on that particular subject. On the other side general
knowledge
 is
also
 useful to students who are economically backward and cannot afford money in big institutions to compete against others in
this
 competitive world
To conclude
, in every ,school it is mandatory to include practical skills like visiting historical museums, zoos, and biological gardens and implementing visiting good places to get proficient in various languages to survive in
this
 world.
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