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The promoters of social media claim that they are connecting people and enabling people to share like never before. While critics claim that social media site often impinges upon one’s privacy. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#promoters #media #people #critics #site #impinges #one’s #privacy
The users of social
media
 platforms
believes
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 that social networking has enabled people to connect and communicate in an extraordinary way.
Whereas
, critics declare that
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it has an adverse effect on the private lives of the netizens. I agree that social
media
 has negatively affected
on
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one's
privacy
;
however
,
this
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 essay we will scrutinize both
the
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views. On one side of the coin, social
media
 has significantly improved
the
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communication and connection in a revolutionary manner
by
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 several ways.
To begin
 with, the world has become a global village because of the excessive use of electronic
media
 and we are just a click away to perform any kind of online
activities
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.
Furthermore
, a person can be aware of the current affairs around the globe as it has a friendly user interface as compared to
the
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traditional
media
.
For instance
, we can share information within
fraction
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 of
seconds
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 by using
applications
such
 as WhatsApp, Instagram or Snapchat.
Therefore
, the promoters are strongly in
favor
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 of
such
media
. On the flip side, electronic
communicating
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applications
 has adversely affected the personal lives of
it's
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 user.
Firstly
, the addicts of
such
 services frequently
shares
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 their day-to-day routine and often flaunt and it has increased the fear of missing out fever among the users.
For example
, recording their personal acts in form of mini blogs has become common among many influencers.
Moreover
, continuous allegations have been made
on
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 the security and
privacy
 policies of
the
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social
media
 apps by many organizations
on
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 the secret intrusion of
such
 electronic communication
applications
 in one's private life. To recapitulate,
although
the
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social
media
 made
easy
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 to connect, it has made our lives more complicated. It has rapidly increased the fear of missing out
within
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among
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the
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users.
Moreover
,
the
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security
breachs
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breaches
breach
 and intrusion
in
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privacy
remains
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 a constant threat
for
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 the consumers of
such
applications
.The promoters of social
media
 claim that they are connecting people and enabling people to share like never before.
While
 critics claim that social
media
 site often impinges upon one’s
privacy
.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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