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Band 4

The world today is a safer place than it was a hundred years ago, and governments should stop spending large amounts of money on their armed forces. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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In recent years, the world has transformed
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the
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 safer place compared to hundred years ago. Personally, I disagree with the statement that governments should Over the
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 few
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 people do not have to consider
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the threat of
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war in many parts of the world.
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 some
country
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 still conflicts in
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war, we can easily get
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information about the war,
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 the development of
tecnology
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technology
. Over the decades, each country spent considerable money
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thier
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their
 armed forces to protect nations. It clearly shows
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 government's attitude toward to
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insurance
 safety in the place.

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