Most morden families have both parents working and as a result children spend less time with their parents. What is the reason for this?what problem can this cause?

In
this
contemporary era, a lot of married couples are too occupied with their work and hectic schedules which
prevent
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them from spending more time with their children.
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essay will demonstrate how financial problems and longer working hours are the main reason causing
this
issue
as well as
the impact of
these behaviour
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this behaviour
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causing to the rest of the family members. First and foremost, the main factor that contributes to shorter hours spent by
parents
with their offspring is the financial issues faced by the
parents
. After married, many
husband
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husbands
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and
wife
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wives
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find it difficult to cope with a lot of payments
such
as house
loan
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loans
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, bills and household needs.
Therefore
, both of them need to work hard and sometimes do overtime in order to gain extra money.
For example
, statistics from the magazine Economy
demonstrates
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that about 70
percent
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per cent
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of married couples are working extra hours
especially
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,especially
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those living in urban areas.
Additionally
, one of the significant
issue
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issues
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that rises is child neglect.
That is
to say, as their father and mother are often busy, children spend most of their time growing up alone or with their friends.
This
could impact their upbringing as they have no one to turn
into
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if they faced any problems at school.
As a result
, many of these individuals feel lonely
due to
lack
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of attention from family.
For instance
, research from
Royal
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the Royal
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Colleage
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College
of Psychiatry shows that around two-fifth of
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a child
the child
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child
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children
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with working
parents
have depression. In conclusion, lack of money
are
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the biggest causes that lead to busy
parents
. Guardians need to be aware of
this
so that it does not affect the
child
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child's
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upbringing.
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