Most morden families have both parents working and as a result children spend less time with their parents. What is the reason for this?what problem can this cause?
In
this
contemporary era, a lot of married couples are too occupied with their work and hectic schedules which prevent
them from spending more time with their children. Correct subject-verb agreement
prevents
This
essay will demonstrate how financial problems and longer working hours are the main reason causing this
issue as well as
the impact of these behaviour
causing to the rest of the family members.
First and foremost, the main factor that contributes to shorter hours spent by Change the determiner
this behaviour
parents
with their offspring is the financial issues faced by the parents
. After married, many husband
and Fix the agreement mistake
husbands
wife
find it difficult to cope with a lot of payments Fix the agreement mistake
wives
such
as house loan
, bills and household needs. Fix the agreement mistake
loans
Therefore
, both of them need to work hard and sometimes do overtime in order to gain extra money. For example
, statistics from the magazine Economy demonstrates
that about 70 Correct subject-verb agreement
demonstrate
percent
of married couples are working extra hours Change the spelling
per cent
especially
those living in urban areas.
Add the comma(s)
,especially
Additionally
, one of the significant issue
that rises is child neglect. Change to a plural noun
issues
That is
to say, as their father and mother are often busy, children spend most of their time growing up alone or with their friends. This
could impact their upbringing as they have no one to turn into
if they faced any problems at school. Change preposition
to
As a result
, many of these individuals feel lonely due to
lack
of attention from family. Correct article usage
a lack
For instance
, research from Royal
Correct article usage
the Royal
Colleage
of Psychiatry shows that around two-fifth of Correct your spelling
College
Add an article
a child
the child
child
with working Fix the agreement mistake
children
parents
have depression.
In conclusion, lack of money are
the biggest causes that lead to busy Change the verb form
is
parents
. Guardians need to be aware of this
so that it does not affect the child
upbringing.Change noun form
child's
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