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The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features ,and make comparision where relevent.

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features ,and make comparision where relevent.
The line graph presents the
number
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 of
visitors
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 who are visiting a specific
Caribean
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Caribbean
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island
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 over seven
years
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.
Overall
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, the total of
tourists
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 who are visiting the
island
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 is increasing. The
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visitors
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number of visitors
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 who
stay
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stayed
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 on
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island
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the island
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 showed a great
number
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 in the first
years
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,
while
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 dropped the
last
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 tears,
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 with the
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visitors
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number of visitors
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 who
is
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are
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 stating on cruise ships, they increased over the span.Totally, the
two
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type
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types
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 of
tourists
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reveal
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reveals
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 a dramatic
growen
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growth
 in these
years
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. The first
type
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 of people who are
stying
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staying
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 on cruise ships
start
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started
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 with about
quarter
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a quarter
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million
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visitors
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 to the
island
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 in 2010 and
this
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number
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 went up in 2011 to reach half
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million
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a million
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,
then
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 dropped again in 2012 to the same
number
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 as
2010
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in 2010
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 at 0.3
million
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.
However
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,the
number
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 of
tourists
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 rose gradually over the
followed
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following
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years
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 from half
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million
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a million
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 to reach the highest
number
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 of
two
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million
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visitors
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 in 2017. The second
type
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 of
visitors
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 who are staying on
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island
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the island
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 start with around 7000
thousends
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thousand
thousands
 in 2010 to reach 1.5
million
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 in 2013.
Then
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 from 2013 to 2015, it
remain
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remains
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 steady at 1.5
million
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tourists
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.For the
last
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two
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years
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,years
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 the
number
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 of
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island's
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the island's
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visitors
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 fluctuated to reach
approximitly
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approximately
 one-fifty
Million
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 of
visitors
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. The total
number
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 of the
two
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type
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types
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 of
tourists
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 is rising
up upon
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in
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 these
years
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 and it reach over 3.5
Million
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 people in 2017.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, visitors, island, years, tourists, two, type, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 5 times.
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