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The illustrations show how to chocolate is produced

#illustrations #show #chocolate
The pictures show how
to
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chocolate
 is
manafactured
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manufactured
.
Chocolate
is mainly contains
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of
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cacao
 pods and other ingredients, like milk , sugar
such
 kind of aromas and others.
Cacao
 trees
is
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are
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 principally grown in
south
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South
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 America , Africa and Indonesia .The process of
chocolate
 production
consist
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 of 10 basic steps. The process begins with
cultivate
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 a lot of ripe red
pod
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pods
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. Next white
cacao
beans
 are harvested .
Then
beans
 are fermented and
they
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dried
into
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sun . After that dried
cacao
beans
 are put in large sacks by hand . At the following stage
cacao
beans
transported
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 by train or lorry directly to the factory.
Next
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 step is taking
beans
 into the factory. And all
beans
 are roasted at 350 centigrade . Roasted
beans
 are crashed and
its
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their
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 outer skull
removed
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 in
next
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the next
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 stage .
Finally
 ,
inner
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the inner
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 part of the
beans
pressed
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is pressed
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 and
liquid
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the liquid
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chocolate
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is
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almost ready to produce .
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