To improve road safety, there should be more severe punishment for drivers who break the rules. To what extent do you agree or disagree

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for drivers who break the rules in order to increase road safety.

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the statement, I agree because some

people

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can be more careful on the road when they are aware

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the rules. In summary, the responsibility of road safety is for all the

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who

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it. Not only for the drivers but

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for

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who walk and the store owner on the edge of the street.

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, it is important to follow the rules and respect other

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

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Lexical resource: 6.0

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Grammatical Range: 6.0

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To improve road safety, there should be more severe punishment for drivers who break the rules. To what extent do you agree or disagree

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

In many cities, planners tend to arrange shops, schools, offices and homes in specific areas and separate them from each other. Do you think the advantage of this policy outwiegh the disadvantage?

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Wealthy countries should accept more refugees and provide them with basic assistance, such as food and housing. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In some countries young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies.