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To improve road safety, there should be more severe punishment for drivers who break the rules. To what extent do you agree or disagree

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Some punishment
needed
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is needed
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 for drivers who break the rules in order to increase road safety.
According to
 the statement, I agree because some
people
 can be more careful on the road when they are aware
about
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of
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 the rules. In summary, the responsibility of road safety is for all the
people
 who
using
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use
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 it. Not only for the drivers but
also
 for
people
 who walk and the store owner on the edge of the street.
Thus
, it is important to follow the rules and respect other
people
.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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