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The maps show the park which was built in 1920 and current construction of the park.

The maps show the park which was built in 1920 and current construction of the park.
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The given
maps
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 provide information about the development that has
experienced
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been experienced
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 in grange park since 1920. A glance at both
maps
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 shows that there were some incredible changes during the period. Take a look at the centre of the
maps
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. in 1920, the water fountain was placed in the main part of the
maps
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,
however
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, today it was taken over by the rose garden attached with seats, located on each side and corner of the park, on every side of it . Just on the left of the fountain, the stage for musicians was omitted and an amphitheatre for concerts was built on the place.
In addition
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, previously, rose gardens that were three in number were reduced and only the above
of
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the amphitheatre still existed
while
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 the cafe today was constructed to replace the garden beside the entrance. The pond for water plants moved a little bit in the south, and the glass house no longer existed currently.
Initial
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The initial
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 place of the pond was built a playground that children could access it.
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Finally
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 to maximize the space and mobility, a car park was erected
on
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underground
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the underground
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of
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at
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 Arnold venue.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words maps with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 4 times.
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