You have a Facebook friend living in another country and s/he is curious to learn about a major news item in your country. Write a letter to your Facebook friend. In your letter describe a news story in your country explain why people are interested in it say how the story personally relates to you

Dear Mike, I hope you are doing well. I am glad that you are interested in researching tourism
news
in my country. Well, there are various tourist places you would like to
visit
and get to know more about history and how ancestors used to live in the country for centuries. As you are aware nowadays India is viral on every
news
channel about tourists and the government
also
noticed that many foreigners booked their air tickets to
visit
and do research about heritage palaces and temples. These are the
news
you would like to add to your
news
story. You must know why many are into it because of their passion and curiosity, which
also
attract them to
visit
and obsess with the culture like you. I
also
have the same feeling about visiting those places as my personal views and I visited the Mahabaleshwar temple and Taj Mahal which are famous for not only tourists but for residents too. I experienced much to
visit
often
while
having feelings of loneliness. Lots of love, Hardik Mehta
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coherence cohesion
Ensure the letter has a clear introduction, body, and conclusion. Organize your ideas into clearly defined paragraphs, each addressing a different aspect of the task.
task achievement
Address all three points in the task: describing the news story, explaining why it's interesting, and relating it to yourself. Expand each point to fully explore the topic.
coherence cohesion
Use a range of cohesive devices (such as 'also', 'because', 'well') to link your ideas more clearly. Avoid overusing words, and ensure pronouns refer back to clear nouns.
task achievement
Personalize your response to the topic to show how the story relates to you. Include specific examples and emotions to make your letter more engaging and relevant.
coherence cohesion
Initiate your letter with a proper greeting ('Dear Mike,') and close with an appropriate sign-off ('Yours truly', 'Best regards', etc.). These contribute to a suitable tone and structure.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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