Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Some say that
publicity
is very successful at making people
purchase products, while
others argue that advertising is so normal that individuals do not pay attention. This
essay would argue that although
companies know what people
want, there are
too Change the verb form
is
many
Correct quantifier usage
much
publicity
, which makes people
exhausted and annoyed.
On the one hand, companies know what consumers are looking for. This
is because before making any advertisement, they will make
different Verb problem
conduct
analysis
and Fix the agreement mistake
analyses
researchs
to ensure that what they offer is what Correct your spelling
research
pepole
want, in Correct your spelling
people
this
point, the cooperation had almost succeed
. Change the verb form
succeeded
Then
, the only thing that they need to do, is make a creative and original announcement to catch people
's eyes. For instance
, nowadays many company's
advertising Fix the agreement mistake
companies'
look
like a short movie and Change the verb form
looks
are
more interesting than it was before, as they might show something that has nothing to do with what they sell, but Correct subject-verb agreement
is
people
are able to relate them
. Change preposition
to them
However
, I believe that people
normally do not even watch an entire advertising
.
Replace the word
advertisement
On the other hand
, there are too many advertisements in these days. People
are able to watch publicity
in
social Change preposition
on
medias
, applications, websites and in the street. Correct your spelling
media
People
might see almost
hundreds of Rephrase
apply
advertising
Replace the word
advertisements
everyday
, and they get tired and angry Replace the word
every day
of
them. Change preposition
at
This
is because advertising normally blocks or stops what people
were
doing, and they need to wait for the Wrong verb form
are
publicity
to end so they can continue. No one will feel good when they are stopped at
the middle of an activity or a video. Change preposition
in
For instance
, normally there are around two advertisements at the beginning of each video in
YouTube, and there might be more in the middle of the video. Change preposition
on
People
do not stay watching the publicity
, instead
, they will take advantage and use this
time for something else. In my opinion, there is excessive
amount of Add an article
an excessive
publicity
, so people
get used to watch
it and do not pay attention to Change the verb form
watching
them
.
In conclusion, Correct pronoun usage
it
although
companies nowadays know what people
are looking for, individuals can watch publicity
in every place, which makes them feel angry and tired, and, that is
why I believe that people
nowadays do not pay attention to them.Submitted by elenazheng1211 on
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