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The charts show the most common complaints of passengers of two international
airlines
 plus their passengers’
overall
 satisfaction level.
Overall
, it is evident that the two
airlines
'
services
 are different from one another.
that
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which
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 expresses a minimal degree of client pleasure BlueSky Airways charges more for one-way tickets, yet competing
airlines
 appear to offer superior
services
. Blue Sky Airways performed better where scores varied by only 11%, up from airline service. One World Air Most of them are airline
services
 and Low-food quality 17%, poor customer service 21%, expensive tickets 35%, lost or delays luggage 6%, delayed or cancellations
flight
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flights
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 28%, Limited space on
plane
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planes
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29%, and others 14%. One World Air Satisfaction Survey 76% out of 100%, which is still not very
satisfied
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satisfactory
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.
On the
contrary
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,contrary
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 Blue Sky Airways
have
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has
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 provided the
services
 of the same
airlines
is
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as
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 Low-food quality 24%, poor customer service 3%, expensive tickets 31%, lost or
delays
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delayed
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 luggage 8%, delayed or
canceled
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cancelled
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 flights 22%, empty space 36%, and others 9%. In a survey of Blue Sky Airway
satisfaction
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,satisfaction
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 87% out of 100% were not satisfied with the best. If compared at the
world class
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world-class
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 level.
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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