Some people believe that competitive sports, both team and individual, have no place in the school curriculum. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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,curriculum most of the sports that are offered are competitive types.

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, some people argue that they should not have a place in the

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programs I disagree with

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their skills to improve themselves in the specific sport to win,

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hard work for being the winner in a competition makes the character of each student strong and teaches them by attempting in life they can reach everything they want.

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is an amazing way to learn students and the most important method for being successful in the future. another reason that makes me disagree with

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conception is in most competitive sports

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should play together .

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action has a myriad of experiments and fun things that make them more cheerful and delightful during

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, nowadays researchers claim that in playful ,situations students are more able to learn new things and the new way of learning tough majors for

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can learn their lessons better and improve in different knowledge. by way of conclusion, I once again reaffirm my position that competitive sports should be in the

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Some people believe that competitive sports, both team and individual, have no place in the school curriculum. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Fully explain your ideas

You had borrowed money from your friend when you were facing some financial problems and forgot to pay it back. Write a letter to your friend and in your letter: ● apologize for being late in returning the money ● explain what happened ● say how you are going to fix the issue now

Some expert believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather that secondary school. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

Nowadays, more and more older people who need employment have to compete with younger people for the same jobs. What problems does this cause? What are the solutions?

As the internet becomes more popular, newspapers are becoming a thing of the past. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

New research has shown that overeating has become a bigger problem in the world than hunger. What are the reasons of this problem?How can solve it?