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The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given table and chart outline the number of sources of
police
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the police
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budget
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 and the way of spending the
budget
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. Both of table and chart seem that they don't have big changes but we can
also
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 recognize some little changes
of
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in
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 numbers from 2017 to 2018. I will analyze the materials focusing on the slight changes. The table of
police
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the police
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budget
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 between 2017 to 2018 can be seen that the
budget
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 of police is totally increased. The source which is gained the most is local taxes,
growed
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grown
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 approximately over than 10m. Compared to the count of Local Taxes, there is only slight growth in National
Goverment
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Government
 and Other sources.
Moreover
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,
from
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on
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 the topic of spending money, the chart shows
to
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apply
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us that the money used for Salaries decreased over the given period
while
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 the proportion of technology
is
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apply
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increased
as
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in
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same
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the same
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 percentages. It is estimated that spending money
in
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on
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 salaries would be decreased
continuely
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continually
continuously
.
On the other hand
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, the data
of
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for
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 buildings and
trasnport
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transport
 is
same
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the same
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 as before.

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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words budget with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fiscal allocations
  • Revenue streams
  • Budgetary oversight
  • Expenditure
  • Financial appropriation
  • Government grants
  • Local taxation
  • Operational costs
  • Capital investment
  • Public safety
  • Crime prevention
  • Community policing
  • Resource allocation
  • Year-on-year comparison
  • Budgetary constraints
  • Fiscal year
  • Fund disbursement
  • Budget deficit/surplus
  • Trend analysis
  • Financial sustainability
  • Law enforcement funding
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