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At the present time, the popualtion of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people. Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?

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There has been an unprecedented rise in population
since
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 a decade. Some nations'
population
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populations
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 consist of a relatively large number of young adults as compared to older
citizens
. I will explain both the pros
as well as
 the cons, and will eventually conclude why the positive aspects supersede the negative ones. On the one hand, there are several disadvantages if a
country
 has a high percentage of teenagers.
First,
older
people
 are more intelligent
,
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 and are capable of contributing to a province.
This
 is because because they are not only more experienced but
also
they
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have conquered many challenges in the past.
For instance
, an elderly person will be able to contribute to a project of a company in a more effective manner. They have seen many issues in similar projects before and know how to deal with them.
Second,
they guide younger
citizens
. To elaborate, a younger individual can learn correctly only with the help of an older individual.
On the other hand
, it is essential for a
country
 to have a huge number of juniors. Young
people
 are active and physically fit. They can,
thus
, contribute to a lot of
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 tasks. For a
country
's economy to run smoothly a massive amount of manual labour needs to be pursued.
As a result
, teenagers are more beneficial to a
country
.
Furthermore
, young
people
 are happier than older
people
. As a fact, it is scientifically proven that high levels of happy hormones are released from the endocrine glands of younger humans. Obviously, a
country
 would want its happy index rate to be high for the
overall
wellbeing
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 of its
citizens
.
To sum up
,
while
 there are many positive aspects of having older
citizens
, there are
also
 many positive aspects for a
country
 to have a higher count of young individuals. I strongly believe
that
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that the advantages of having older
people
 do not outweigh the advantages of younger
people
.
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