some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortages of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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been a topic of controversy among individuals.
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I understand why some people find it easy to accept
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bad situation, I personally believe that it is always good to never give up and try to come out of bad situations. On the one hand, there are two main reasons why folks agree with whatever is happening in their lives. First of all, they believe in fate and
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if they are in worse circumstances it is because of karma or
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the fruit of wrong things they might have done in their past lives.
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comfortable in some situations
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they are scared of losing their jobs and are more willing to work harder to stay in those places
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scenarios. A person should learn from their failures and should try to work hard to accomplish their goals in the competitive market rather than just being in the wrong place. They should make an effort to improve their weaknesses and should grab any opportunity which might become the ladder
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success. In the conclusion, despite understanding why people are accepting to stay in their worse times, I reckon that individuals should take
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their own lives and should prepare themselves mentally and physically to improve these conditions.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • pragmatic approach
  • mental peace
  • stoic attitude
  • proactive measures
  • personal growth
  • financial management
  • sense of accomplishment
  • resignation
  • helplessness
  • stress and burnout
  • fatalism
  • collective well-being
  • self-determination
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