‘Prisons are an expensive way of making bad people worse’ To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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There is

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saying that prisoning people is not cheap and only makes them worse. Some folks will agree, and others will disagree with

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statement, fortunately, I disagree with

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opinion.

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in my opinion,

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acts as a redeeming place for the prisoners, because they will relearn society-acceptable behaviour before coming back to society.

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, without

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, folk who did a bad deed will not get a consequence for their wrongdoing and

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do not have a place to counsel them into a better self.

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, in American prisons many inmates are relearning religion so they can connect to better perspectives and understanding, without getting locked up, they will not have

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kind of exposure and continue what they have done before.

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without

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, the public will have more bravery to do bad deeds, and they will not get scared about doing criminal activities because no huge consequence will befall them.

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, with how many people live in the world nowadays, it becomes so hard for the government to take into account people one by one.

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, the government will get difficulty observing them from far away, which

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generates another expensive expenditure cost to pay the observer's living wage. In conclusion, I disagree that

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is expensive because without

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the cost to observe and make criminals accountable for their wrongdoing will be a lot more expensive.

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, in

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, observing, counselling and preparing them to come back into society will be a lot easier to do.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 7.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

253 words

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‘Prisons are an expensive way of making bad people worse’ To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

The charts detail the proportion of Australian secondary school graduates who were unemployed, employed or further education in 1980, 1990, and 2000.

In many countries today, people in cities either live alone or in small family units, rather than in large, extended family groups. Is this a positive or negative trend?

Some people believe that communication skill is important in convincing people while others have a different point of view. To what extend do you agree or disagree

Some say that advertisements of snacks and toys have a great impact on children and their parents. So, the advertisement to children should be banned. Do you agree or disagree?

In some countries, companies allow people to work from home. In others, people are still expected to work in an office. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.