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Doctors should be responsible for educating their patients about how to improve their health. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#doctors #patients #health
In recent years, people choose to go to
doctors
 and take care of their
health
 more. But
doctors
 should not be responsible for educating their
patients
 about how to improve their
health
. In my opinion, I do not agree with
this
 topic. After the covid pandemic, healthcare
service
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idoes
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does
 not have enough human resources to serve in hospitals or medical stations. Especially
doctors
 who exercise all day at their office, are very busy doing
health
 checks, and operations
,
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 and they do not have enough time to manage the
health
 of
patients
.
Doctors
 might help the
patients
 check and prescribe drugs, sometimes they give some instructions about how to keep their
health
 well in place or there are many treatments online to support the
patients
 quickly. In order to go to
doctors
,
patients
 should keep and control their
health
 by themselves. they have to do exercise
such
 as join some operations outside or walk along their street and have more vegetables than meat. They focus on losing
their
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weight if they are overweight and have
high
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 blood pressure to prevent
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an emergency
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emergency
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. the
patients
 should not refer to the
doctors
 helping them or have the responsibilities to take care of them. Each person who has a responsibility for himself
,
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 has a responsibility for his family and for society. In conclusion,
doctors
 have only helped the
patients
 who need to know how to manage their
health
 and
doctors
 should not have any responsible education for the patient to improve their
health
. it is the best way for all.
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