The given table illustrates the data about the independent films released in the UK and the republic of Ireland based on the category of movies in the year 2012.

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The table chart provides information about the

number

of film genres launched and the proportion of revenue

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from

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selling tickets in the UK and the Republic of Ireland in 2012.

Overall

the

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apply

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drama and

documentary

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documentaries

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were the most movies produced,

however

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comedy categories dominated the income.

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glance

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data show that both documentary and drama contributed 23,6%% of all releases and put them as

highest

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the highest

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number

. Following with

commedy

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comedy

that is

only 26 productions,

however

, it

resgistered

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registered

as the most popular genre, almost

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half compared

others

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to others

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and horror films were

frefered

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preferred

referred

by people after the funny

one

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ones

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Furthermore

, society

also

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is also

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atracted

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attracted

watching

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to watching

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scary movies where

acording

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according

to the data more than a fifth

tickets

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of tickets

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sold

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are sold

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. The

biofic

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biopic

bionic

was taken place as the lowest

number

film

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of film

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which was created, merely one. In

trestingly

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trustingly

testing

, with the less

number

, it could give 9.1% income from selling tickets. The rest of

film

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the film

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types were released just as less as 13 and contributed not more than 5%

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The given table illustrates the data about the independent films released in the UK and the republic of Ireland based on the category of movies in the year 2012.

Whether or not someone achieves their aims is mostly by a question of luck. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It's a country of people are encourage to work a travel for a year between in high school and study university discuss the advantage and disadvantage of people who decide to do this.

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Some people think that if a country is already rich, further economic development will not result in its citizens being any happier. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some students decide early in life to pursue vocational careers that involve cooking or baking. For them, it is better to study their chosen occupations in high school rather than regular subjects. To what extend do you are or disagree?