The given table illustrates the data about the independent films released in the UK and the republic of Ireland based on the category of movies in the year 2012.

The given table illustrates the data about the independent films released in the UK and the republic of Ireland based on the category of movies in the year 2012.
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The table chart provides information about the
number
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of film genres launched and the proportion of revenue
by
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from
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selling tickets in the UK and the Republic of Ireland in 2012.
Overall
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,
the
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apply
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drama and
documentary
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documentaries
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were the most movies produced,
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however
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,however
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comedy categories dominated the income.
At
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glance
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of
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data show that both documentary and drama contributed 23,6%% of all releases and put them as
highest
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the highest
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number
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. Following with
commedy
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comedy
that is
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only 26 productions,
however
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, it
resgistered
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registered
as the most popular genre, almost
a
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apply
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half compared
others
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to others
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and horror films were
frefered
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preferred
referred
by people after the funny
one
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.
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, society
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also
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atracted
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attracted
watching
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scary movies where
acording
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according
to the data more than a fifth
tickets
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of tickets
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sold
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are sold
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. The
biofic
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biopic
bionic
was taken place as the lowest
number
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film
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of film
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which was created, merely one. In
trestingly
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trustingly
testing
, with the less
number
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, it could give 9.1% income from selling tickets. The rest of
film
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the film
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types were released just as less as 13 and contributed not more than 5%
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
Vocabulary: Replace the words number with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • illustrates
  • independent films
  • categories
  • released
  • notable differences
  • trends
  • overall patterns
  • specific numbers
  • analyze
  • popular
  • themes
  • less likely
  • explored
  • independent cinema
  • significant disparities
  • data analysis
  • terminology
  • genres
  • descriptive terms
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