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Some people believe that using a bicycle as main from of transportation has a lot of advantages, whereas others think that it has many disadvantages. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Nowadays there are different opinions about that, some people prefer using a
bicycle
instead
 of driving.
While
 some argue that it has a lot of benefits. Others claim that it has many drawbacks to their life. I believe that if they ride a bike, it's good for the environment. To commence with a view on the former group, there are two reasons behind their position. First is that the main advantage of using a
bicycle
 is that it is convenient to ride cheaper as compared to other motorbikes and can easily get repaired.
Moreover
, they have
advantage
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 which is
this
 tone muscle,
this
 way of travel cannot only be environmentally but
also
 help people to maintain a healthy lifestyle. In order to have consistent exercise during the day.
For instance
,
according to
 statistics, in developing countries, 63.7
percent
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 of individuals prefer using a
bicycle
instead
 of driving.
On the other hand
, from the point of view of some people, they really have their own claims to justify the position they take, let's start with the fact that one of the disadvantages of cycling is that sometimes it can be unsafe. Since cyclists can easily make their way along a busy road, they are more likely to cause traffic accidents, as some drivers may not see them.
For example
, recently my younger brother had an accident, as he was riding a
bicycle
 when a car collided with him.
As a result
, he was injured. The strength of their arguments is obvious, but their concretization does not deserve praise. In total, cycling definitely has it is advantages, which are that it can reduce air pollution by harmful gases in the atmosphere, which can cause serious health diseases.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • carbon emissions
  • motorized vehicles
  • traffic congestion
  • cost-effective
  • sense of community
  • harsh weather conditions
  • road accidents
  • physical disabilities
  • sustainable practices
  • health benefits
  • infrastructure
  • feasible option
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