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People say it is the responsibility of the residents to keep the environment clean and tidy while others think it is the government's responsibility. Discuss both views and give your opinion with examples.

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Individuals say
this
 is the biggest responsibility of the masses to neet and clean the
environment
while
 others claim that it is the authorities' responsibility. From my own perspective, the former proposition appears to be more rational,
however
,
this
 essay will
further
 elaborate on both notions with relevant examples. There is a myriad of reasons which will
further
 explain
this
 argument but the most preponderant one stems from the fact that it is very easy for human beings to clean their
environment
along with
 encourage others.another pivotal aspect of
this
 argument is these days the traffic problems increasing dramatically which causes many
people
 to suffer from serious diseases and it is hard to find fresh air to breathe.
For instance
, in big , cities every family members have their own vehicle but
instead
 of using all of ,them they may try to go outside with family only in one
as well as
people
 need to put their rubbish in the dustbin rather than throw it away.
Thus
, a little bit of change may help a lot in the improvement of the
environment
 clean. In another school of thought, the government should need to encourage individuals to clean.
Secondly
,they may give their messages through news channels. To quote an example, Prime minister Narendra Modi launch a law of (swathe mein abhiyaan hai) and they encourage
people
 to clean their
environment
 because for living happily it is essential.
As a result
, many
people
 grow plants and
also
 encourage others. In conclusion,
According to
 the argument aforementioned above hand to hand clean
environment
 has amazing befits rather than only depending on the government.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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