Nowadays, a growing number of people with health problems are trying alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting their usual doctor. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

It is one of
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issue for patients who
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illness
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is the most proper thing they can do. Some
people
who have diseases try to find other solutions like changing medicines or
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of curing them rather than contacting
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their doctor
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even though
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their problem. In
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or
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of taking care of their situation and
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method is
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thing if their
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treatments don't work in a good way.
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side should think
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them healthier than before.
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damaged illness which is hard to handle will try to find any possible options they can take even if it is effective or not.
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have a chance to give solutions to care
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patients there is no reason to visit
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medical
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anymore. As
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mentioned, handling the conditions in a different way may
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for
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of
people
. Another side of taking alternative options could be seen as a
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gambling
. If those sick
people
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evidence of
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, it will
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their lives.
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Furthermore
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confusion to check their current body condition. It's better to lean on their own doctor who knows them for a long time than
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answers from strangers. Like
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new choices and
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time, taking alternative ways could become the best selection.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • alternative medicines
  • treatments
  • positive development
  • negative development
  • health problems
  • usual doctor
  • access
  • personalized approach
  • holistic well-being
  • lack of regulation
  • evidence-based research
  • proper medical treatment
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