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Some people believe social media is very important in our daily life, other believe it is waste of time. Discuss both the views and give your opinion

#people #media #life #waste #time
The table compares the five
highest ranking
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 countries in terms of the
numbers
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number
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 of visits and the money spent by
tourists
 over a period of two years.
It is clear that
 France was the world’s most popular tourist destination in the years 2012 and 2013.
However
, the USA earned by far the most revenue from tourism over the same period. In 2012, 83
million
tourists
 visited France, and the USA was the second most visited country, with 66.7
million
tourists
. Spain and China each received just under 58
million
 visitors,
while
 Italy was ranked fifth with 46.4
million
tourists
. 2013 saw a rise of between 1 and 4
million
 tourist visits to each country, with the exception of China, which received 2
million
 fewer visitors than in the previous year. Spending by
tourists
 visiting the USA increased from $126.2
billion
 in 2012 to $139.6
billion
 in 2013, and these figures were well over twice as high as those for any other country. Spain received the second highest amounts of tourist revenue, rising from $56.3
billion
 to $60.4
billion
, followed by France, China and Italy. Interestingly, despite falling numbers of
tourists
, Chinese revenue from tourism rose by $1.7
billion
 in 2013.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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