With the wide use of computers and the Internet, people can study and work from home without going to school or company. Do the advantages outweigh its disadvantages?
The
expand
of using internet Replace the word
expansion
technorogy
and Correct your spelling
technology
computer
made individuals learn or work in their own Fix the agreement mistake
computers
home
. For Fix the agreement mistake
homes
this
situation, I suppose that the drawbacks, which people
become unable to build better
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a better
relationship
with coworkers or friends without Fix the agreement mistake
relationships
face to face
communication outweigh the benefit, which workers or learners save their Add a hyphen
face-to-face
time
and money because of no need of
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apply
time
for commuting or going to the school.
On the one hand, this
trend might enhance the quarity
of life because citizens do not need to take the Correct your spelling
quality
time
which
they utilised for going to the place, like Correct pronoun usage
apply
work place
, clients’ offices and schools. To save Correct your spelling
workplace
these
Correct determiner usage
this
time
, they can utilize their time
more productively by enjoying their hobby or having a meal with their family or friend. In addition
, commuting makes enormous workers get much stress, due to
the
most commuting trains are always packed with Correct article usage
apply
people
, and it is generally crowded in
stations. Change preposition
apply
To reduce
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Reduce
these
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this
time
leads to employees being healthy and their work efficiency would increase.
On the other hand
, this
environment have
a risk to deprive the opportunity to effectively communicate with other colleagues or students, and it might cause Change the verb form
has
the
decrease Correct article usage
a
of
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in
communial
consciousness. In Japan, Correct your spelling
communal
for example
, senior workers tend to have a
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apply
time
to have a
dinner with coworkers, and Remove the article
apply
this
action have
a positive effect Change the verb form
has
to
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on
people
to rely
on each other. Change the verb form
relying
However
, because of pandemic
, they cannot make Add an article
the pandemic
a pandemic
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it these
these
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this
time
, and as a result
, numerous
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a numerous
the numerous
number of
younger Correct quantifier usage
apply
staffs
resigned within 1 Fix the agreement mistake
staff
years
. Change to a singular noun
year
Additionally
, remote
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a remote
environemt
prevents elementary school children to make Correct your spelling
environment
a
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apply
basis
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basic
of
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apply
the
communication, Correct article usage
apply
such
as getting along with
other people
and expressing the esteems for eldery
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elderly
people
.
In conclusion, I reiterate that remote circumstances could cause the
negative influence Correct article usage
a
such
as lucking of opportunity
for building relationships with others, and it outweighs the positive point, Fix the agreement mistake
opportunities
which
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that
people
can save their
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apply
time
instead
of commuting or going to the
school.Correct article usage
apply
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