With the wide use of computers and the Internet, people can study and work from home without going to school or company. Do the advantages outweigh its disadvantages?
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expand
of using internet Replace the word
expansion
technorogy
and Correct your spelling
technology
computer
made individuals learn or work in their own Fix the agreement mistake
computers
home
. For Fix the agreement mistake
homes
this
situation, I suppose that the drawbacks, which Linking Words
people
become unable to build Use synonyms
better
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a better
relationship
with coworkers or friends without Fix the agreement mistake
relationships
face to face
communication outweigh the benefit, which workers or learners save their Add a hyphen
face-to-face
time
and money because of no need Use synonyms
of
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apply
time
for commuting or going to the school.
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this
trend might enhance the Linking Words
quarity
of life because citizens do not need to take the Correct your spelling
quality
time
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which
they utilised for going to the place, like Correct pronoun usage
apply
work place
, clients’ offices and schools. To save Correct your spelling
workplace
these
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this
time
, they can utilize their Use synonyms
time
more productively by enjoying their hobby or having a meal with their family or friend. Use synonyms
In addition
, commuting makes enormous workers get much stress, Linking Words
due to
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the
most commuting trains are always packed with Correct article usage
apply
people
, and it is generally crowded Use synonyms
in
stations. Change preposition
apply
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Reduce
these
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this
time
leads to employees being healthy and their work efficiency would increase.
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environment Linking Words
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a risk to deprive the opportunity to effectively communicate with other colleagues or students, and it might cause Change the verb form
has
the
decrease Correct article usage
a
of
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in
communial
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communal
for example
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a
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apply
time
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a
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have
a positive effect Change the verb form
has
to
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on
people
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to rely
on each other. Change the verb form
relying
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, because of Linking Words
pandemic
, they cannot make Add an article
the pandemic
a pandemic
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it these
these
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this
time
, and Use synonyms
as a result
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numerous
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a numerous
the numerous
number of
younger Correct quantifier usage
apply
staffs
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staff
years
. Change to a singular noun
year
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, Linking Words
remote
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a remote
environemt
prevents elementary school children to make Correct your spelling
environment
a
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apply
basis
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basic
of
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apply
the
communication, Correct article usage
apply
such
as getting Linking Words
along with
other Linking Words
people
and expressing the esteems for Use synonyms
eldery
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elderly
people
.
In conclusion, I reiterate that remote circumstances could cause Use synonyms
the
negative influence Correct article usage
a
such
as lucking of Linking Words
opportunity
for building relationships with others, and it outweighs the positive point, Fix the agreement mistake
opportunities
which
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that
people
can save Use synonyms
their
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time
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instead
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the
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