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Some people think that the best way to improve road safety is to increase the minimum legal age for driving a car or motor-bike. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It has been said that the minimum legal
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 for driving and riding should be increased so as to improve
road
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 safety. Personally, I firmly disagree with
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 idea for two main reasons.
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 with, in order to improve
road
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 safety, we should emphasize people’s driving and riding skills rather than their
age
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. The main reason why there are thousands of traffic accidents is that because the driving tests are too simple, those who do not have standard techniques still qualify for driving licenses.
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although
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 some teenagers do not have driving licenses, they drive well on the
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.
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,some adults are not good at driving which leads to numerous driving accidents.
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,there is no doubt that young
age
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 is not always the reason why
roads
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 are unsafe and driving skills are the most essential part of
road
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 security. The second reason is that a proper design of
roads
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 is more essential than people’s driving
age
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. When the
roads
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 are designed in a strange way,
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 people follow them properly, they still will cause car accidents. Take, Taiwan,
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. Taiwan is regarded as a “pedestrian hell” by BBC
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 the fact that pedestrians have to walk closely with vehicles as the government did not design
roads
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 which are suitable for every
road
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 user. In conclusion, designing good
roads
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 for users is far more important than increasing the minimum
age
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 for driving. To summarize, as far as I am concerned, I disagree with the idea of rising the legal
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 for driving and riding is not useful to improve
road
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 security for two major reasons.
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,training the public’s driving skills before they get their licenses is more effective to improve
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 security.
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, planning out
roads
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 which are suitable for every
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 user is
also
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 a key point to help the improvement of
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 safety.
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