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Prison sentences are often too light, and crime rates are growing in many major cities. Capital punishment is necessary and good Do you agree or disagree?

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of
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electricity
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 in ten different countries in 2014. Generally speaking, it is obvious that there
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 more
production
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 than
consumption
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 in nine nations.
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over
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overproduction
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production
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 in one country.
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 with, in China,
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 was produced more than its usage,5398
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 and 5322
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, respectively.
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, the USA produced 4099
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electricity
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,
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 it consumed 3866
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kWh
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. Meanwhile,in Russia, both
production
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 and
consumption
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 stood at similar figures, 1057
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kWh
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 and 1038
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kWh
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,respectively.
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six countries including Japan, India, Canada, France, Brazil and the public of Korea,each of them used less
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 than their
production
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.
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,in Germany ,there was more
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, 582.5
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