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In some cultures, children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enoung

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There was an old saying if you really want something hard enough the result might not be far off. These
day
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 children have been told they could archive everything the most important
reason
 is they try hard enough. If the question about
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the dream
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dream
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is address
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 it will be challenging for us to reach our decision on
this
 controversial issue. The advantage is out weight the disadvantage and the
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this
 topic The first
reason
 is
discipline
, it
challenge
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 individual to become better
it
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like
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 something that keeps each person in control. It motivates a person to progress in life and achieve success. Everyone
follow
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discipline
 in his/her life in a different form.
Besides
, everyone has his own prospect of
discipline
.
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, George St
Pierr
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Pierre
 was heavily
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 when he was young
as a result
 he began to take martial art and
dream
 one day he will
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 a champion. He
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discipline
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 for ages and now he is
the
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 current ufc hall of fame. The second
reason
 is planning, every road
lead
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 to Rome planning and organization skills
include
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 setting goals and managing priorities to meet established objectives, outcomes, and timelines, and demonstrating an ability to organize and carry out multiple tasks or projects at the same time.
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,
According to
 local university smart planning help
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 to reach
they
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 full potential. In conclusion, Children have the right to
dream
 but in order to do they must execute smart planning and stay
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 on the task. The
would be
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 an empty place if no one
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dream
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